I think you may need to remaster this one. It’s too hot. Unless it’s your intention to have distortion on all of the kicks. Is it?

Nice beats to start us off. In my left headphone things begin to happen, but my right headphone sounds empty. I like the strings in the backing. Finally, at 1:30, the “heaven’s fate” begins to come out on the right. I like the bass line pretty well, though it might be fun to have sections without the bass to keep it from getting too repetitive. Some of the EQ sounds a bit hot, so that I think there may be a bit of clipping here and there. The mix might benefit, also, from re-distributing the elements between left and right, as the song sounds almost mono except for some sections when it is stereo. This can sometimes have a cool “live placement” feel, but here it just sounds as if different mixing choices might have been more effective. I like that you’ve made this uptempo, as that mood goes with the vocal. Overall, this one doesn’t quite work for me, but the issues are more mix/EQ rather than musical in the more traditional sense.