Maybe it’s because it’s not my type of music but I had a hard time getting into this. It starts off sounding kind of sloppy. I mean, I see how it all ties together in the end, but I can’t really vibe to this song. That and the ending really doesn’t do it for me… I occasionally use guitar chops like here, but I tend to find that I like it more dead on. What program did you do your recording/mixing on?

The intro has a raw feel to it, with the electro surge fitting well in a raucous way. The intro goes on too long for me.

I like the percussion things you get going at 1:00 ish. They really get the piece moving. This kind of minimal dub can be really cool, like when you have those little high pitched notes interpolating in.

As you note, it’s loosely slung together, which has its good points, but I’d like to hear you tighten it a bit. That’s because you have some really cool things like that section from 2:30 to 2:45, that I’d like to hear sooner in the piece. Part of the fun for minimal dub, to me, is that a spareness of purpose means that it’s a goal to keep elements from lingering on too long. I love that percussion thing you get going around 3:50ish. Every time you start panning percussion variations over the throbbing rhythm line, it works really well.

I’d suggest you twin the bass line on different tracks, and pan back and forth between them to get more variation here.

I like a lot of what’s going on here, but it’s all much too long, with the great parts obscured by the parts in which not enough is going on. This would be really fun if it were 3:30 and used all the cool elements in a more varied way. It’s not bad as it is, but there’s so much promise here of something more.