The diverse vocal samples don’t work very well for me, as the pitch alignment sounds imperfect to my imperfect ears.

The drums are pretty cool, although they don’t always match up with the vocals, and I like the way you’ve put some spaces in the mix to bring Lisa’s voice out. But there’s lots of places where you have little backing sounds that need to be more prominent, to get their impact in the piece.

The piece’s good sense of mood does not make up for its technical flaws. But it’s got some interesting things in it.

I think it might be fun to bring up your backing instruments, keep your drumbeat, add more instruments, and drop the vocals. It would make for a more workable piece.