interesting ideas here but there are couple things are just too distracting to get over: I think you fall out of sync in several places (mainly in the verses), I haven’t heard the original but the intonation takes a hit in the chorus, the hit hat is interesting pattern but it’s mixed way too hot for my ears and I would have shortened the actual hits so it’s gets a lot tighter. Again, good idea but the production would benefit a lot by tightening these things up.

It’s a good track, somekind funny, but still very good!

I really like this hook :)

thats a clean production
like your keyboard playing

nice work