Interesting job, but I feel the voice not belong to the track. 2 main issues Timming, and treatment of the voice. The voice doesnt fit with the tempo and sometimes is very notorious. And second issue, is very dry. If you use a vocal that dry that vocal should fit perfect with the track or will be very obvious music and track doesn’t belong together.

If you slice the verses in the vocals is easier to rearrange and fit that track with the music.