The synth-woodwind in the break is a vast improvement on this one. I like the jazz feel you’ve given this version, a contrast with the dark ambience I went for originally.

I’m not so crazy about this one, there’s quite a MIDI quality to sounds and the mix is very in-your-face especially strange considering the mood (I think) you where going for.

Having said that, the fact is, it is not without a lot of emotion and if I was scoring a scene in a film I would totally consider this one.