i like the drums and how the vocals were fitted in……i think, that some extra sounds would be nice

Nice start but it seems to need more. Being different is nice but IMO it’s just plain.

suffers from either a) ancient drone syndrome or b) da krunk syndrome. what I mean is, there’s no structure. the nature of lisa’s vocals lend themself greatly to being used in creative ways, but as a whole they are bland. try switching it up some.

of course, that’s just my opinion.