Hey and welcome to ccmixter!

I think you have a great idea here - the instrumentation works really well with the vocals; but I think the vocals themselves are a bit of a letdown in this track.

Great idea though. Look forward to hearing more from you.

I agree with colab. I really like the idea. If you upload a version without vocals them maybe people can have a stab at laying some vocals down for you. ;)

Listening to the original vocal though, it seems like you’ve done some heavy processing. Either that or they are distorted. Maybe you could dial it back a bit?
Just a thought.