This is great Abhi. Give me time and i hope i can do it proud.

Dude, How you been?

Yo, I was a little afraid to listen to you, but damn I really like your flow and the content of your lyrics have fire and conviction - you mean what you say and you say what you mean.

Keep the lyrics short and the meaning of the lyrics twice as strong, remember what GZA said long ago. Your lyrics are way too long - cant give the listener too little, but give them too much and they tune out. 8 bars, 12 bars, 16 bars - try to make a structure of how long your flow is going to be as you write a song.

Your flow, how you say it, is just as important as what you say. I really like your flow, so practice like a shaolin monk. Distort or slur the words or add a new syllable, play with your flow - people will understand by how you say it.

Think about Ghostface Killah. I really dont understand half the shit he say, becasue so much homemade slang. But I understand it because of how he rap and how he emote with his flow - he mean that shit when he say it.

Listen to your favorite musicians, rappers and singers and study they breath control.

Learn breath control - take a deep breath before you begin spitting your rhymes and learn how to breathe naturally as you rap. This will take time - you sound a little out of breath when you rap, which interrupts the flow. You will get it, but it takes time.

Find a realistic way to license, promote or advertise your music with a small budget - do you know people who can get it on a local commercial or TV show theme or can you host a party and get some local celebrity guest? I dont know your situation - how can you realistically, effectively and affordably make some noise for yourself.

Dont worry about money - get your name out and when the opportunities come, then come the money.

Keep rapping man, when I hear your voice I know you respect rap music - so I really respect that too.

(Keep making beats too man - the world need rap producers too)

Lava flow. Memorize what Clarance said. No criticism, just good advice.